Post by ~*Age*~ on Jun 3, 2011 16:21:48 GMT -6
Moving on to Lesson 3: descriptions. It's better to describe what the character is doing.
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a face.
Good, but what kind of face?
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a sour face.
That's good. We can now see that he is unhappy about being alone in the dark.
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a face.
Good, but what kind of face?
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a sour face.
That's good. We can now see that he is unhappy about being alone in the dark.