Post by ~*Age*~ on Jun 3, 2011 16:33:12 GMT -6
So far, we have this:
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a sour face.
It's a good start but not quite long enough. I'm going to add more description to it.
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a sour face. Being alone, he walked at his own quick pace.
Lesson 4 is about putting your character's personality into the post, by showing what he or she does and how they act. The young man walks at his quick pace, but he is alone. maybe he walks too fast for most other people to keep up. It implies that it irritates him, or that he's not proud of it.
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a sour face.
It's a good start but not quite long enough. I'm going to add more description to it.
The young man walked alone in the dark. 'I hate the darkness.' he thought, making a sour face. Being alone, he walked at his own quick pace.
Lesson 4 is about putting your character's personality into the post, by showing what he or she does and how they act. The young man walks at his quick pace, but he is alone. maybe he walks too fast for most other people to keep up. It implies that it irritates him, or that he's not proud of it.